1. Physical experience- BYU Wilkinson room on the third floor
- hard floors with thin carpet
- big group of people dancing together
- sewing our Hawaiian skirts
- work out clothes every Saturday morning practice
- sweating from practicing for 2hours
- dancing bare footed
2. Scenes
- luau practice every Saturday morning at 6am
- walk to the BYU Wilkinson in the snow
- dividing up into groups to practice together
- remembering the songs my grandparents would play when I would go to their house
3. Speech
- chanting the songs
- talking with the other dancers
4. Emotion in the moment
- happiness
- understanding
- joy
- connection
- remembering growing up
- friendship
5. People of consequence
- luau instructors
- other dancers
- my cousins dancing in luau
I love your description for the scenery--even fleshed out in simple sentences like that I felt I was walking with you to the ballroom, following your course, which is a beautiful thing to do as a writer with the reader. It adds a new effect and relationship for the essay.
ReplyDeleteWhat a great way to connect to your heritage and remember your grandparents. I find it interesting how participating in activities like dance can remind us of many past events. Can't wait to read the finished product
ReplyDeleteI think it would be really cool to expound on your cousins dancing in luau- what was that experience like? Are you closer now? I also like how you said it makes you think about growing up- pulling on the nostalgia would be compelling. I agree with Emily that your descriptions are great and I look forward to seeing more of them!
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