*Revision Plan: From the feedback from the
comments online, as well as from Dr. Burton, the memories of the childhood home
are very relatable and very penetrable—something most people can connect to.
Peers appreciated some of the detail, and I hoped to amplify that somewhat in
this revision. I specifically aimed to create a more concrete, viewable
characteristic of my home other than “bumpy tan walls”. Another aspect of
change is my focus on my dreams and how it could be related to Lehi’s dream. I also
have more of a focus on characters rather than just setting.
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Friday, November 7, 2014
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